FORMAL REGISTER. BE MINDFUL OF THE P.A.C.
Dear Mrs Tan, (Beginning salutation)
I would like to inform you about the class concert item for the fundraising event. (No greeting. Start with purpose) The class concert item will be a song performance by the whole class using the ukulele. (Point 1) Sally, John and I have chosen this item because we have been learning how to play the ukulele during our music lesson. (Point 2) There is an additional item which is a dance performance by Peter and Ling. The dance performance is after the ukulele performance. (Point 3) We have chosen this additional item because Peter and Ling are dance club members. (Point 4) The practice session for the class concert item will be on 14 September at 3.30 pm (Remember: When = Day and Time) after our remedial lesson. (Point 5) We will be practising in the performing arts studio. (Point 6) I hope you like the items we have chosen and thank you for giving us a say about the class concert item for the fundraising event. (Repeat the purpose and closure. Be polite)
Yours sincerely, (Ending salutation)
Mary Lee (Signing off with name and surname)
Dear Mrs Tan, (Beginning salutation)
I would like to inform you about the class concert item for the fundraising event. (No greeting. Start with purpose) The class concert item will be a song performance by the whole class using the ukulele. (Point 1) Sally, John and I have chosen this item because we have been learning how to play the ukulele during our music lesson. (Point 2) There is an additional item which is a dance performance by Peter and Ling. The dance performance is after the ukulele performance. (Point 3) We have chosen this additional item because Peter and Ling are dance club members. (Point 4) The practice session for the class concert item will be on 14 September at 3.30 pm (Remember: When = Day and Time) after our remedial lesson. (Point 5) We will be practising in the performing arts studio. (Point 6) I hope you like the items we have chosen and thank you for giving us a say about the class concert item for the fundraising event. (Repeat the purpose and closure. Be polite)
Yours sincerely, (Ending salutation)
Mary Lee (Signing off with name and surname)